Real name: Aashykaa
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Name: Aashykaa Manoj
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Age: 16
Nationality: Indian
I Love: cats, chocolates, seafood and Daniel Radcliffe
I Hate: dust, too much talc powder, bullies
I admire: my mom, Daniel Radcliffe, Justin Bieber, R.L. Stevenson
My Favourite
Color: blood red, sea blue
Book: Treasure Island by R.L. Stevenson, The Thirteenth Tale by Diane Setterfield
Song: Spacebound and Beautiful by Eminem
Hobby: Writing stories, poems and songs, listening to songs
Actors: Johnny Depp, Tom Cruise, Ben Stiller, Adam Sandler
Singer: Selena Gomez, Taylor Swift, Eminem
Movie: Deja Vu, 50 First Dates, Night at The Museum
Video: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Tp2eRG-bwjc
Rated: M - Mature (18+)
[Reviews - 4]This is a hinny fanfiction taking place after the war. I have changed it slightly. Hope you enjoy it. Sorry I'm rubbish at summaries but please read it. It's filled with hinny moments
Category: Movies > Harry Potter, Movies
Characters: None
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Series: None
Chapters: 4 | Completed: No | Word count: 31306 | Read count: 7941 [Report This]
Published: 04/08/2014 | Updated: 05/20/2014
Date: 05/03/2014 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3
The story so far was good, especially the songs. The wordings and everything about the songs were just great. There are spelling mistakes and grammatical errors. But then, there are only few authors who don't make mistakes. The paragraphs are too long. Make sure that you have 7-8 lines minimum on a paragraph. Long paragraphs make readers groan. And also check your story after you've typed it for anything at all. When you're reading your story, after completing it, read it as a critic. Opposing your own work. That will help refine your stories. Anbd the story was reall great. Please do finish it.
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review it means a lot. I did check it a few times before I posted it but I guess I still missed some things. I will take your advice on board and try to change for the better. Again thank you very much :)